the last stanza here is the best... I feel like you never really describe what you did to screw up the world and saying it could really enhance the imagery and emotion in this poem. This is well done.

...now I would like to read the connected story...heh. I like it! Y'know, Legolas said something about how there was a battle when the sun set red. Interesting.

...i added it to favorites...too zoned out to write review...hard day...here's a try...nice! _

Oooo...I like this, I like this a lot. I especially love the way you turned it into something hopeful in the last line...nice, very nice. Keep up the great work!

That was really original. I liked it. "Now they'll all be mad at me." Heh heh...

like it. specially the way the last line admits that there's still hope. thank you. :)