Hi hi meanie )Anyways, personal FEELINGS aside, yes i have feelings...ur poem...it's form is somewhat abstract, that's your style and i respect that, i find that there are too many '...' but it shows incomplete ideas, hesitation, makes a good effect thoughhm...you could have expanded on the vocab P what i love bout ur writing is ur vocab, if u can use more vocab, it'd be great, but rite now, it's pretty darn good, hahaI'm kind of confused as to how the first two lines correspond with the following 6 lines...but i see the meaning of the, and i think that's really good, simple and clear, preciseall in all, the best thing about this is the sense of despair u can feeli enjoyed it thoroghly, goosebump factor was a solid 8 out of 10, which is pretty good, lol