Reviews for Imperfect
cascadestars chapter 1 . 2/13/2006
Short & beautiful. I love it. && the formats cool, too! :D
RedHairedWriter chapter 1 . 2/9/2006
it's amazing how so few words can paint such a vivide picture... I think I read somewhere that the mind fills in the blanks. I love this, for that the 'i' isn't capitalised, I think that something has happened to make the subject (I don't like talking like this but I don't know what else I can say, so subject must do, sorry) feel like she (assuming sorry) has lost her sence of self worth. to me I see her as having an icy outlook, depressed, maybe numb... but that doesn't make sense in the big picture "pressed hard against my bare skin" ... that makes me think of a knife or a dead body... I don't know why, but also circumstance. sorry to blabber on. I really liked this, whatever it really is about - if it has a meaning.

p.s thanks for the review.
Elliptical Shapes chapter 1 . 2/9/2006
Tell you what I think?

Ok, to be honest I was thinking about nakedness here, then sex. Is that because i'm male?

I'm serious, this is a sexual piece; at least to me any way.

Pink Sparrow chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
i don't use capitals in my writing a lot, don't worry. It's nice, short but saying everything. nice work.
ADSpencer chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
Beautiful. This formed a clear image, but it also gave way to emotion. Nice.
Aquafied chapter 1 . 2/6/2006
kind of reminds me of a poem that one this one contest that was really , interesting.

i like it.
Charmy chapter 1 . 2/5/2006
It's okay! You'll be just like... what's his name. XP You know, the poet who made his own form of writing that's real unique and would've gotten him an F from his english teachers, but yet he became famous for his poems. Well anyways, It's a real nice poem. It's short, but gives you something to think about.
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 2/5/2006
Very visual and somewhat contrasting. I like the format, it works well in this. Good work.
Teufel66 chapter 1 . 2/4/2006
It is truly amazing how powerful haikus can be (despite their limited length). I enjoyed this one, it is indeed very powerful. i've also read some of your other works, and they are a delight. keep it up. _
Emi Amara chapter 1 . 2/4/2006
Hiya, i like the fact that the poem is on a certain emotion -or that's implied by 'weeping' - yet the reader doesn't know the full story. Newayz, well done...
a lonely september chapter 1 . 2/4/2006
i like it without capitalization, i always write that way. this was well written. i cant write haikus at all, so i really liked this.