As you chant your hymn in these flowers of flames...awesome fuckin line dude. kind of asphixiation erotica huh? neat. cheers man.

Very lush, very florid - perfect phrases for a Harlequin romance poem. As I'm sure you intended, the words dance around - although this is hardly a conventional dance! The rhyming helps too...

I like the way you contrast the grace of some stanzas with the more - coarse? - language at other times. It's quite unusual.

Interesting piece...

Wow. Stunning work here. Very elaborate, this holds nothing back. This poem really lets you have it.

Great job.