I was very excited to see a new e-mail alert in my inbox for this story. I read it all in one gulp, and just re-read part of it. I enjoyed the bit with Dana and Vlad; her smacking him was a nice touch, hehe, especially since she only does weird things like that when she's off balance.

It was a bit refreshing that Sirel wasn't in the story; not that I don't like her, she's an awesome character, but the storyline seemed that much more concise and knit together without extra characters. The characters in most of the story (Dana, Jamnis, Kathleen, Michael) were the one's that were most involved in the plot, which made the story much more enjoyable. I like how you know exactly how to use your characters, and when they come in and when they should fade out. :)

yaay

This was a great chapter funny and very enjoy able. I laughed at the conversasion between Vlad and Dana. I love it and so can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.

Tanya

Well, you made me laugh with both Vlad and Sirel's conversations. (Vlad's especially, but bother were quite funny.)

The humor is a nice comedown from the action.

Livi

Hehehe, 'kay, so maybe not a twist, more like a bend. And now there's gonna be more 'bends' in the last couple of chapters? I can't wait!

Your updates make my day, I'm glad to see that everyone made it out alright. I wonder why Chance and Jamnis are disagreeing on how to handle the situation. I can't wait for the next chapter, although sadly I can see your story is winding down.

Hey high school graduate!

(Sorry I've been MIA... again... second year uni is HARD)

The last two chapters were fantastic to read, I feel like I've reconnected with the characters again. Jamnis is beginning to be a little... brutal... which I suppose is one way of emphasizing that he's not human, but I don't think anyone could really be comfortable in a relationship with someone that (well, I guess the closest word is:) bipolar. Sometimes (infrequent) he's charming, but most of the time he seems to be freakishly possessive and unstable. Maybe not as crazy as Kat, but then there can only be 1 person that screwed up. So I guess basically what I'm saying is that if I was Dana, I'd probably be scared of him. Then again, Dana comes off as a little clingy, probably because of the whole family thing, so maybe she would find his blind possession/obsession more comforting? (and the whole being-attacked thing... but yeah...)

Yuki, on the otherhand, is missing all six of the sixpack! Lol what an angry man. I think the public humiliation is a much better solution, in real life and for plot, than simply killing him. Hope this means Sakura and Chance can finally relax! They deserve a break.

I Heart Kathleen.

Anyways, good work! Until the next instalment!

Wow…I wonder if this is how you’ll feel when you review the climax area of my story. But YEAH! You are writing another one! *claps excessively* Onto the review…

I love how uniquely you began this chapter: in thought. It’s a rare thing, and the way you did it pulled off an amazing heartstring-tug within me, because I immediately remembered where we had left off- Yuki, standing beside Dana, and no one around to really help her. At all. Ineffable points for suspense.

And…heehee….I love Jamnis. I don’t know if I’ve ever mentioned this before, but if I weren’t so content with Dana being with him, I think I would most certainly abandon Vlad for Jam. Definitely. I love his character, and you displayed his shiver-inducing traits perfectly in this chapter, as you always have. I cannot tell you how much I loved the part where he was pretty much suffocating Yuki with dirt- it gave me shivers and giggles all at the same time (if that’s possible). You displayed how well he really knows Dana, and perhaps just knows humans, because of the way he instructed her to run away (step-by-step and slowly: “Sit up, stand up, turn, and run.”) There simply aren’t enough ways to praise that literary brilliance, and I don’t know if I’ve ever commended you for making such an amazing character, but ineffable points for creating, molding, and keeping Jamnis (and of course, therefore, more suspense and LOVE).

Your reasoning for making Yuki cowardly is…great. It makes perfect sense and the contrast between him and Eliot is great. A lot of times I have to actively try to make my characters vary, but the way you write, it all seems so seamless. Of course, as a reader, I am thoroughly disappointed that Yuki is not DEAD now…but I guess it’s only proper justice that he face the legal court system he’s been defiling so many years now with this ‘stalk and cast’ business. A brilliant thing to do, if I might add, that Caroline will get to test out her new DA authority to bring justice to the bastard. _ Teehee. Ineffable points for a witty plotline.

And what was with him giving her his blood, anyway! Is he STUPID? COME ON! First of all, it’s going to give her power, heal her, make her stronger… And second of all, it’s going to piss her lover off (or did he not notice that they’re together?)! So what if he thought he would be able to control her, shouldn’t he have been watching her the last time she got messed up by his contamination? Dana wasn’t exactly the nicest girl around- what makes him think she would be to him? Bugger.

Oh…but you know what this means? I do. It means…ah! And you gave us a little glimpse of it too (“…a vampire that young has no notion of self-control.”… “Says the man who slammed me up against a wall to hold me still for a drink after we spent one night apart.”). Jamnis and Dana get to have alone time! *dances around* The suspense, hardship, evil buggers, ex-lovers, and disagreements make the romance all so much more worth it. Ineffable points for such an amazing love relationship (and probably the best in the Vampire world).

The changes that you made really fleshed out the suspense, doubly so because you paralleled it to Bad Blood, bringing back emotions and events we readers already know, and this approach made the situation even more…real, even more threatening to Dana. I felt like I was Dana because of this, because you played on things I’ve already experienced through Dana, and you brought that all back to tie in with Yuki’s choking her. “And all I understood when Yuki’s grip ended was that I had air again,” described everything perfectly, how being choked had taken away all her conscious thoughts down to the primitive need for air. Ineffable points for more suspense.

And grr…yes….we all grudgingly accept Kat now…unfortunately. Now that means that she’s going to show up in the future, the cousin that no one likes entirely, but know enough about to let her stay or whatever… I do love that it was she who knocked out Yuki, more importantly, braving her own past tortures and memories to save Dana’s life. Ineffable points for characterizing her.

I suppose I should comment on Dana’s character as well, but I just find it so hard because…well…you do such an incredible job of her through first person that… I feel like I AM her, in ways, and as such…find it hard to describe the many changes that she has gone through. I think, though, that this chapter showed a glimmer of bravery within her against her experience with Nathan’s diamonds into her neck. She didn’t get to fully confront and conquer it, because Kat took care of Yuki, but within her was a defiance that overcame what had once been a deer-in-the-headlights reaction. Neither everything nor everyone in life can be perfect, but we try, and this displayed such logic perfectly. Ineffable points for being an ineffably brilliant writer.

Thank GOODNESS Jamnis found a way to escape before the sun rose! And…I guess Kat, too…but I still say they should have left Yuki…although that would have been too short a punishment for him.

I find myself truly curious as to what the next chapter(s) will be like, and, as sad as it is for me to think of this series ending, your future writings.

This is a wonderful chapter and climax that I wish I could find the words to praise more fully, but since I can’t, I will (and have) take a thing or two from Zira and Crowley by saying that your writing is and always will be ineffably, amazingly great.

Oh great chapter and it was worht the wait. I loved it. Keep up the great writing and please post more when you can.

Tanya

I would say your humor is consistent and unfailing, but maybe fear of being humorless is what keeps you humorous...hehehehe. So how exactly will the police react? I think it would be rather interesting if yuki escaped once more, lol. It can't end just yet, after all...maybe during Dana's testimony on the stand...

Yeah and thanks for updating. Congrads on your high school completion.

I think they went fairly well. One of my venues was ironic - I took an AP test in the Special Ed room.

They could've taken care of Yuki by leaving him in the sun. Dana does have a propensity to get strangled . . . And it was awesome when Kathleen beaned him with a rock. Again. _~

Livi

That took a while. but another cliffy

I love every chapter. This is another great chapter. I hope everyone heals alright. I'm surprised that Jamnis didn't completely go balistic! I can't wait for more. update soon please.

Another great chapter, as usual. Nice to see a Jamnis part where he doesn't rip somebody in half-actually, I'm always kind of amused by his pent-up frustration...:) Just makes him even hotter. I like the Kathleen-Michael friendship relationship. And though I like her more than usual, it's still fun to see her as an emotional wreck. Update soon please!