|Reviews for Blood Book The First: Victoria|
| fizzfuzzfooz chapter 1 . 12/16/2008
please update (:
gripping stuff !
| BreatheNJ chapter 1 . 2/1/2008
| Between2Worlds chapter 1 . 6/10/2006
awe come on you cant just leave it there! Please write more soon. The fear is so powerful I can taste it!
Keep writing till your heart's content
| Wyngz chapter 1 . 2/8/2006
By all means you must continue, although I have to point out a few things. I sort of got lost at the end. I realize that she was in the chapel but you weren't explicit with the details. Details are wonderful and I do struggle with that myself. Another thing I noticed was that you don't seem to know the difference between There and Their. She would be there soon. Soon she would be theirs. I also noted a few spelling mistakes and I was slightly amiss about why she was running. More detail on that fact would be lovely too. It was just a little hard to get into it but I do believe you have talent and if you'll just sew up the odds and ends, this will be a perfectly lovely, graphically violent story. My favorite. - I would like you to post very soon.