Reviews for Grief
Lorraine Anslover chapter 1 . 1/16/2009
Some time try to "not rhyme" . Keep trying. Nice work.
Justin Carlton chapter 1 . 2/14/2006
Good poem, Jill - I like the progression, and I can tell you put a lot of emotion into this. I find that I always write my best works (albeit I'm a songwriter rather than poet) when I'm in an extremely emotional state.

The only stanza that was a little funny was this:"Why do you stay behind that cloud and leave us in this cold? / This type of disappointment is growing very old."

There are too few syllables in the second line, or too many in the first - however you want to view it.

Other than that, awesome work. I told you I'd check you out, didn't I? LOL

Keep writing.
Kristina Suko chapter 1 . 2/11/2006
I love your poem, Jill! You got reveiws! That you very much deserve!
poemkitten7 chapter 1 . 2/10/2006
Oh my gosh! I am seriously breathtaken! That is such a sad and cute poem! I was about to cry! *gasp* Very emotional and touching. I love it! *adds poem to favorites* GOOD JOB!
Anguria chapter 1 . 2/10/2006
aww... that's so sad. i love how it's from the sun's point of view and how accurate it is. :D