What the hell? Oh gosh, how can you do this to me! You can't just kill him off! Please change it or something, okay no don't. It's your story but I'm soo depressed now... Why did he do that? I don't get it... He liked her and she liked him and he talked to her and then he went and offed himself! Jeez!

Hmm. For some reason, I smiled at that. (Not the fact that he...y'know. Killed himself and all.) In the beginning, I liked the fact that she talked to him. And I sort of knew in the back of my mind, that he had been noticing her.

...I know a guy named Aiden. Funny thing is, even though I've told him to go away, and to shut up, and that I hate him, I don't think I could ignore the fact that I'd be really... very shaken if he ever did die. Because I think I secretly like him. ...I have no idea why I'm telling you this.

Sorry!

Omg! I knew someone was going to die, but that was so sad! I was like, why did he kill himself? But then I thought, well maybe he was the happiest he'd ever been and he couldn't bare to go back. but still. I don't know. Ha ha. I loved it by the way. D

Love,

Becca

this is so sad..

but why?

i mean he finally got a chance to talk to her.

damn.

oh well, it's better than a perfect ending.

i liked it though.

aww this was depressing.. and cute at the same time. ]

wahh.. it was a very good, very sentimental story.. it actually made me cry (well, i seem to be doing that a lot lately.. freakin' hormones..).. stupid unrequited love stuff..

but why didn't we know why he freakin' killed himself? don't tell me he did that because he has served his sole uroose for living having talked to her that afternoon, 'cause if that was it, i'd robably stab myself to death.. anyway, except for that.. uh.. major hole in the story it was beautiful so hurrah, hurrah for you.. XD

i read ur fic a few years back and now its been 4 years and im writing my short story and i forgot i read it until my sister was givin me some motivation for mine and we both read yours and we were very moved by it. u write really well, keep writing!

by the way i changed my first short story which was horror and wrote a romance one instead. thanks for the inspiration.

That guy sounds so hot! I really want some coffee now .

Great job!

That is (one of) the most depressing story(ies) I have ever read. Really well written and sweet, though.

the story was good i have to give you that. i understood why they didnt end up together. you have categorized this one-shot as Tragedy/Romance. the problem is that you left one of the most important part that this one-shot would definitely need..

And that is, why he killed himself without a reason? It stated he had this journal with all his activities and perspectives written on it. why not also state a meaningful sentence that would say it all...not exactly saying why but almost as if a vague implication of why he did it so...

heyy, i read this and thought it was really good and i was wondering whether i could print it and submit it as part of my inspiration for the short-story course i'm doing.

*Frown* Wonderfully written.

Wow, that actually made me cry a little. Very emotional and beautifully written.

wow, that was absolutely fabulous, i love it, though if the guy didn't commit suicide them he would have started a great relationship with the girl, i near expect him to did, great twist!

This is upsetting. it was wonderful, but why did he have to commit suicide? poor fellow.