i liked this one as well. the repitition worked to a good effect, and the rhyme scheme i also thought worked very well. have had these feelings before, so i know what it's like. wow i have those now... scary. awesome work.

~shadow in Aminor

This is so relatable (or at least for me, anyway)! I love the way it rhymes. Very deep, very awesome.

~dragonzz~

You did an excellent job in writing this. I think that everybody's been in this position before, and you did a beautiful job in expressing that.

All in all, I like your work. Write on!