This is really good, especially if you were fifteen when you wrote it. The number format really makes the poem unique, and you pull it off well.

Constructive criticism? Well..."two names across the star exposes" doesn't completely make sense...maybe "stars" would work...but it still wouldn't be gramatically correct. But i'm nitpicking.

Beautiful.

Wow...i love the short lines and couplets (not to mention the pleasant imagery), keep up the good work ]

mhmm i love this number format and i especially like your choice of words. this i really pretty, keep writing. vday makes a lot of ppl write- he i did too. this is just super pretty and happy and evokes memories. cool