Reviews for what i want
Edraith chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
Wonderful diction, I love the beginning. The ending is so sad and not how it should end, I can see why you wouldn't like it, but it does express the feelings you wanted to vent at that moment and the words are well chosen, so from a poetic point of view it is fine. I just don't like it becuase it is not what He would want the speaker to do, there is always another way. Anyway, still a really good poem, and as I said I love those first few lines that express the speaker's need for God.
Hidden Lies chapter 1 . 2/19/2006
breezy nostrils chapter 1 . 2/19/2006
it's not crap. i think it's fine the way it is, but an artistic is its own worst critic. nice work tho!
HauntedMisery chapter 1 . 2/19/2006
This is so beautiful and sad; this is one of your best pieces in my opinion, so amazing and beautiful.