| Reviews for I just can't |
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   M. W. Ttoc chapter 1 . 10/8/2006 Beautiful and well written, this was the first work of yours that I've read and I really like it |
| look-blue chapter 1 . 9/4/2006 i love this poem! her denial and her love for him is just *sigh* keep writing! |
| Embellished Heart chapter 1 . 6/19/2006 Just wow. Perfect. |
| a lonely september chapter 1 . 5/5/2006 this .sad. and i just love the line about snow white. you did a great job with this one. |
| Pheobe Meryll chapter 1 . 5/1/2006 Very very intense...reminded me of the final scene of 'salome.' You wanted criticism so to be perfectly honest I'd have liked to have seen less italics, bold and such...I think a good poem can stand on its own without it. But it was very well written and though it was really angsty I didn't feel like it was overdone. keep writing. |
| elvenstorm chapter 1 . 4/4/2006 This is such an emotionally charged piece. I wasn't sure at the beginning but the desperation and pure denial was so hauntingly beautiful... The last line especially really makes you feel so sad. An excellent poem well done. |
| TheTypeWriter chapter 1 . 4/3/2006 wow, i love it! ur an amazing writer! |
| Matet chapter 1 . 3/25/2006 T_T that's so sad... |
| Shitsuren chapter 1 . 3/23/2006 very well written .. very powerful .. |
| Hentell Ann Rothorn chapter 1 . 3/15/2006 how sad but it is really good i like your poems please keep writing |
| Mariposa2 chapter 1 . 3/9/2006 This reminds me so much of when i was with my good friend when she found her her boyfriend died(suicide). I'm just kinda stunned cuz it's exactly everything she seemed to feel |
| angelfelicity chapter 1 . 3/8/2006 yet again very powerful. |
| ChasingPerfection chapter 1 . 3/8/2006 Hm...you really like italics, don't you? They distracted me but I also understand why you put them there, I always want to put a bunch of things in italics or underlined too just because they sound like they need it in my head...but to a reader it's really distracting. In my opinion it's better to let the reader add their own emphasis. I like the fairy tale reference too, the uncertainty to which story it was, and the description of the kiss. That's my favorite section! |
| Goblin Coffee Shop chapter 1 . 3/7/2006 as one other reader mentioned...i felt my eyes start to burn while reading this one... ...it has so much frantic power...so hopelessly delerious...and the structure goes hand in hand with that emotion. |
| liquid-dreams-139 chapter 1 . 3/7/2006 cool peom... deep, dark, morbid yet true and emotional... |