Wow, that was completely amazing. I fell in love with the last line. "Home-abortion" confused me a lot though, I read the line a few times and it wasn't until I read the whole thing that I understood the last stanza.

However it was spectacular.

Simple, but intense and powerful.

this is very nice. very very nice. i wish i could write stories like this, but i cant write stories. my paticular muse likes poetry over prose. the only question that comes out of this, is are you english, or just decided to have england as the setting?

This is pretty much downright amazing. I really, really like it. Your writing is fantastic-and this story is SAD but still just awesome.

I haven't seen much narrative poetry on this site, so it's great to find one, especially one this good. The imagery and details really make it one of those poems that you remember.

This is really good. I enjoyed it. :)

I don't have to tell you that this is amazing. It's awful tragic, and I didn't want it to end.

Peace & Love

~ Hp

effing beautiful

This is seriously one of your best pieces...

very nice. its has a poetic fictiony feel to it! you have a great writing style!

~Autumn~

this is a beautiful reality. it thought you expressed real life with a perfect imperfection, without resorting to cliches and well-worn language. i loved it.

wow, this was really awesome. I like the story in it a lot. _

wow.i am so reminded me of me and one of good friends mixed together in your main character , this was exquisite.i think this might be my all time 's gorgeous.

wow i never know what to say in these! as brillant as always! i loved i x

Wow, I totally understand this poem and it's good I saw no problems with it and like I said it's really good.