|Reviews for The Legend of Erulasto & Eruvande|
| Nemonus chapter 1 . 5/18/2006
Pretty good words. Your hero and quest are very typical. Lack of punctuation infects here; ..."of myself, who are you"". Sorry about the critisism personally. :)I don't like your place-names, they're rather awkward. You have more lack of question marks, but I do quite like this line; "What wizardry doth produce this glow".
Sorudalf of Lorthorien. ...your Tolkein cameos are rampant!
"but it was clear from the blow to his head, and from their being ogres, that they meant to hurt the quest." Lol, thank you Sir Obvious...but that's a good thing. :)
Does the girl have any weapons?
Your dialogue of explanation is very stiff in the magician's and orc's cases.
Describe the dragon!
The fight was way too short.
...eh, typical, except the love thing, where at least your admit your sources. :) Not bad.
| searchlight chapter 1 . 2/23/2006
Of course you knew I would LOVE this! Really well-written, great incorporation of many things we've talked about and just, well, wonderful description, I especially liked the description of the ogre's voice. That was fantastique! You are the FP master of the short story and it is the perfect foil to my poem. I hope you get a deserving grade.-searchlight