Reviews for Please Daddy Please
ii chapter 1 . 3/1/2006
Please insert line breaks at the end of every line. I had trouble reading this. Other than that, I think it's rather melodramatic. Maybe tone it down a little?

If you're using HTML to format this, be sure to use br or p / p (without the spaces) for line breaks.
forsooth chapter 1 . 3/1/2006
Short but very well written!