|Reviews for Green|
| Arwen Starfire chapter 1 . 3/2/2006
wow, so sad. it is really good. powerful images. good technique, and you don't use adjectives and adverbs excesively, which is really good, you use very descriptive nouns and verbs.
One thing. you only use a pronoun once in the whole poem, in the line "He cannot see victory for either side." IT sounds odd all by itself. Try and find a way to take it out, like you have for the rest of the poem, I think it will sound better that way.
Hope that helps, and good work,Arwen Starfire
P.S. please stop by and read and review some of my work. I need all the help I can get.