To be honest, I liked your story a lot at the very beginning. Hayden's character being lost, leading an existence that is so meaningless she spends her life jumping from one peak of bodily pleasure to the other, probably because she reflects a type of person that is increasingly present in a society such as ours which keeps becoming less and less religious.

But then the chapter where she becomes a Christian arrived and left me thinking "So... this was it?" this completely lost personage who seems to be anything but the type who would suddenly have faith in a deity that so many people nowadays mock and couldn't believe in to save their life turns Christian just like that? Why? How?

This comment is in relation to your question of whether Hayden's transformation is believable. I won't say it's not believable in the sense that religion is that deep mysterious thing which, according to the testimonies I've read, can take over you before you know it, but the thing is... It's intellectually believable, as in "if people say they've experienced it, it's logical to think they probably have", but it's not like this story has convinced me emotionally, has SHOWN me what the experience of such a radical change of heart is like, it has mostly told me about it. Hayden does at no point even question Christianity, she just accepts it and starts living according to it. I found that this was quite a pity, because interesting Christian conversion stories aren't plentiful over the internet from what I know, so I surely had high expectations for this one, I must admit.

I've made it to the eighth chapter still though because, putting the above element aside, the characters are still interesting to read. I like Hayden and Isaiah's symbiotic relationship (and prefer it over HaydenxRiley for sure) and, to answer the second question, I don't have anything against Taryn. Yes, I would maybe find her a little annoying to be around sometimes if she were a real person, but that's what people are: flawed, but also much more than that. She's a realistic character that I enjoy reading about too!

Thank you for this entertaining story. And now, on to the next chapter! (Yes, I'm planning on reading it 'till the end!)

Im not really religious but i really enjoyed this story and the perspective that you wrote this story from.

Loved this story!

Wow.

I don't even know what to say. This story was amazing. I can relate so well with Hayden. I almost cried at a few parts of your story. And seriously? I haven't almost cried in a long time. I have a problem with letting myself feel and I've been working on it. But something about your story just went past everything. It took me by surprise and normally I would hate you for that...but I don't. I want to feel again and I thank you for indirectly helping me with that.

-PLKAF

I loved this story! I laughed, I cried but all in all I loved it! Very well written!

Gosh I can't decide who I like better! I'm so glad she's trying to change her life...on to the next chapter!

It's funny how I have two very close friends who live their life speaking about God, and sharing their stories, and trying to get me to realize the importance of strengthening my faith, but it's your story that managed to do so. I'm 19 and I've been raised Catholic all my life, and though I don't follow any one religion to a T, the way you've conveyed your story has taught me things my friends couldn't even have dreamed of. So congratulations on such a wonderfully written story, and thank you. :)

I am really enjoying this story. Hayden's journey is interesting to follow and I love her relationships with both Riley and Isaiah.

However, this chapter (and your note at the bottom) bother me a little. I am in my 30s and have been a Christian almost my whole life.

I was bothered by the idea that Hayden and Isaiah regressed just because they slept together. Isaiah's drinking was regression, yes, but I don't equate drinking and doing drugs along with two consenting adults having sex. Even Christians have sex. It's a stereotype that all Christians wait until marriage to have sex and I personally don't think Hayden and Isaiah did anything wrong. I was mad at Riley for saying they had relapsed and that he thought Hayden "was closer to God than that." Having sex is not mutually exclusive from having a close relationship with God.

Anyway, that's my two cents.

;) i cant form a coherent sentence... the story is just too good!

Great Story :) I think . . . I think I'm a lot like your reviewer Nina Bruja, but nonetheless, i stuck with this story (even tho i positively made me want to cry and throttle Isiah {whos name i LOVE}!) and enjoyed it tremendously. You are a very good writer :) please, keep it up!

~ CrazyCowgirl101

Finally finished it! My, I really couldn't stop reading! This is an AMAZING story!

Isaiah has been irritating/amusing in the past few chappies. Hay~ Stupid boy.

Hahaha~ But I understand his feelings. ;)

I'm glad to say the you wrapped up the story satisfactorily. Great job!

*off to read new chappie of The Best Deceptions*

OMG. I only realized now that the rating is M. O.O

There aren't any explicit stuff here... But I get your point about the themes. ;)

This story is just amazing! I couldn't stop reading it! I'm sorry that I couldn't even stop to review any of the past chapters. XD

Anyways, I really like the way you were able to integrate religion into this story. It's not too heavy or too light. It's realistic enough for me! Also, I'm glad that you had the guts to post a story about/related to God. Religion and beliefs about Him are quite controversial. I'm really happy that you didn't feel like you shouldn't talk about God - I heard that's how it is in the US nowadays... Not allowed to talk about Him. :( But He's so awesome!

Back to the story itself...

I've got to admit, there were so many times I teared up in the past chappies - the drama and the life-changing epiphanies. Especially with Matt - it's so touching!

I also love the way you portrayed the feelings of your characters so well - especially Hayden. (It feels kind of weird calling her that because I'm using that name for a guy chara in one of my stories. Hahaha~) Though I do have to admit that I was disappointed that Isaiah and Hayden had sex. It's not morally correct, and considering that they're Christians... Oh well... *back to reading*

Fantastic story! I'm really glad that you've written a story that's really touching and spiritual too (I'm a christian and I like it how you've integrated it into your story). you've got a fantastic skill!

You know what I like, that they joked about sex in here. Like, some people think Christians can't have fun, and they can't joke about things like sex and it's a bunch of bull. I appreciated it, as weird as it sounds. I'm a Christian, I went through a whole Christian rehab center thing, and I can still joke about stuff like that and have fun, and still love God. I really like this whole story so far.

I'm really liking this story, but theres one thing thats bothering me. Why is it that they act like the only way to go to heaven is to believe in god. I'm agnostic myself, and I honestly try to be the best person I possibly can, I don't lie, I don't steal, I try my best not to hurt other people. Wmy isn't that good enough? My pastor brought up a point that really intrested me, Say there's this man living in the middle of the rain forest, he's never heard of god, or our civilization, but hes a good person. Does he get to go to heaven? Is it not unfair to him that because he was born where he was, he never had the chance to know god? You can't choose where you're born.