|Reviews for Jitter|
| MusingDreamer chapter 1 . 5/24/2006
(thankyou for the review on my baby poem!)
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/25/2006
I like this.. very cool
| account not in use chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
reminded me of medieval times. the glitz and glitter to us, years ahead of them, and the horror it must have been to them, but then, it's a horror to us, at time,s and maybe to them it was beautiful.
| candyaddict chapter 1 . 3/15/2006
my mind isn't really understanding much right now, but I loved the beat of your poem. don't mind me. it's the circumstances, and not your poem. XP
| Gilee7 chapter 1 . 3/14/2006
[pay her well / and she will dance / (for thee) / times three -] I love the repitition of "(for thee)" throughout the poem. It always made me smile.
[You - who - staged yourself quite well.] YOOHOO, m!
[Wishes are like time / rotted from an organic decay,] WOW, amazing analogy.
[like the sweetest honey (of / w / a / t / e / r) to melt] I'm trying to figure out why you didn't put the "r" on a separate line, as well. Maybe so "wate" will be like "wait?" Eh, I don't know. I'm sure you did it for a reason, though.
[just a temptress, tempting the common wealth.] Great job of tying the beginning and end together.
This poem was nowhere near as heavy as many of your others. This one had a playful tone; it felt airy and fluffy; flirtatious even (which would make sense with the whole "temptress" thing). Not one of my favorites of yours, but still very good.
| Jezsh chapter 1 . 3/12/2006
oh the way you wrote dripping - that's perfection, you know? Sorry to pick odd bits out but I've had that word in my head for weeks and can't do anything with it. That's lovely, how you wrote anyhow, I love your tone. You're so...just you I guess. I hope you get what I mean.
| fcf chapter 1 . 3/11/2006
Very Freeform, much more interesting than a poem with normal well written too, excellent.
| Kesslyn Rosewood chapter 1 . 3/10/2006
Great poem, and interesting to read. Cool structure to it.
| eden is burning chapter 1 . 3/9/2006
Fanstastic poem, wish I could write like you.
| Doc Blood chapter 1 . 3/9/2006
Thank you for your comments. You really seem to "get" what I am writing about. You are clearly much better at your craft than I, and I appreciate the written proof that I am being understood.
| ExcuseMeWhileIKissTheSky chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
nice, usually i read the first and last part o' yo stories but i read it all dis time( i have low a ttentionn,mnmnmnmnmnmnm span)
| Eyetk chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
Wow. Very amusing structure to this poem! It's great!
On a very small nit-picky grammar note, you have 'a lesser (leg.)'. Methinks that, since the next sentence starts right after this, the period should be on the outside...since it's not really...well, hey, I dunno. This was just great! :D
(Sorry, couldn't resist a smiley there.)
- Eyetk K.
| crazy dog events chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
Gorgeous as always. Never stop.
| Biting My Nails chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
I've read over several times, it doesn't stop being so powerful and beautiful.
All lines are striking to one person or another, that what make your work stunning.
| GeekyChica chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
This is going to sound faintly ridiculous, but I like the poem because I didn't always know what was going on. I thought the parentheses added a lot. It was very... free, I guess.