Reviews for The Prophecy of Gemma William: TGBHYB |
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![]() ![]() ![]() getting good cant wait to read more! update soon! SarahJane |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha, yes, humans misinterpret. forget to carry the one. aw that's it for now i guess. *pops out of existence* |
![]() ![]() ![]() i wonder if there's unemployment services or severance pay or welfare for those poor men under Zarquin. *reading on* o tragedy. yay. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love the tone of this. it's fresh and upbeat and comical (i'm in the comical mood *reading pratchett*). oh a female head. like a female director on NCIS. sry, in a relating sort of mood. anyway, i'll keep reading now. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Tis a tad short, but ya better keep writing |
![]() ![]() ![]() That definitely got more interesting. So the whole thing started early? Not just her being born? Cool! |
![]() ![]() the story is nice but your sentences are a bit choppy, and not really smooth. pls get more out, its interesting |
![]() ![]() ![]() Unique, and pretty cool |
![]() ![]() ![]() I would definitely keep reading this if you updated. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow that was a great beginning! It totally got me interested in the rest of the story! Update soon, please? |
![]() ![]() ![]() this story sounds cool so far, update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() cant wait to read more update soon! ~SarahJane |
![]() ![]() ![]() sounds interesting and im intreaged so i think i shall read on. keep up the good work! ~SarahJane |
![]() ![]() ![]() What next? Can she kick butt yet? She gonna die and get reincarnated in line 100 years or something? *tries to sit still and watch* |
![]() ![]() ![]() A wonderful beginning! The ideas flow nicely, though the transitions could use a bit of improvement and a few supplemental details could be added. Still in all, this is a superb start to what will be a fine tale. The idea is fresh and new, and Terry Pratchett would be proud. :) Incidentally, I love you! |