heh, I remember that. very funny :) I did not know it was pink fluff! Pink fluff for whatever reason is funnier. Or at least it is to my silly mind...Anyway as I hate it when people leave notes w/o critiques...I like how when you're describing the fluff you use a different line for every adjective. "My/pretty/pink/can of shaving cream..." and then again with "pretty/pink/foam and fluff..." (I also enjoy the phrase "foam and fluff" greatly though I'm not sure why). What I don't like about the piece...one it doesn't seem like poetry material to me. If you wanted to write about it, it seems to me like it should have been a prose piece. The other thing I don't like about it is how the shaving cream explosion part of the poem is all drawn out and written on the page all linear-like and the bottom, when you're talking about the vacuum, you use a lot of sentences in a very small space.

Ok, that was funny.

both a poem and a story. very funny! and thank you for sharing with us your wisdom of how vacuum cleaners and shaving cream don't mix. :) nice.

lol! This was quite amusing, I enjoyed it :) Good job!

sorry i don't like this as much as the other one! You could of added in some more description or something but it's just silly in my opinion.

Nice stuff! Bet you weren't laughing at the moment!

hahthat has honestly never happened to me before

cute and comical. strange things happen.

hilarious... Poor you, I bet that was a mess, sounds like my kind of days.

Oh jeez, that sounds rough. But hilarious. I love the formatting.

Lol how strange! Great poem but big mystery, how did it happen! Well done on interesting and very original poem x

ah, the hilarious escapades of life!

i love it. it's really cute, and puts a smile on ones face.