|Reviews for In the Snow|
| Absynthe Greene chapter 1 . 4/2/2006
I don't think sexual is so much your style as sophisticated, but excellent all the same.
| Matet chapter 1 . 3/25/2006
o.O making love in the snow. XD
you are soo from connecticut. by the way, i am too. but i just recently moved to texas this summer. eew.
anyways, great job!
| Hentell Ann Rothorn chapter 1 . 3/15/2006
that is hot it makes me horny i like it please write more on this subject i will keep on looking for new things by you and thankyou for alowing me to read this
| run rabbit run chapter 1 . 3/9/2006
i still hate haikus... but that has nothing to do with your haiku...you acheived what you set out to do, definitely. i apprecite a good set of words so this was neat.
| classic violet chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
oh so gorgeous! so perfect, so beautiful.
| Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
Wonderful haiku. Well constructed.
| kayttea chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
Huh. I dunno how you did with what you said in the summary but its pretty good. Me like.
| ChasingPerfection chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
I like this one! On my first read it seemed innocent to me, possibly b/c one tends to think of playing in the snow as something children do and adults do not. But then I re-read it and it seems much more sexual...I like it! *sits in the corner to ponder on it*
| laughter at the funeral chapter 1 . 3/8/2006
i think i can really feel passion from this...although i think the idea of the bodies pressing hard against each other quite contradicts the idea of playing in the snow...it's like steadiness against motion or something...but its really nice...you did a good job...
| Ebony Stars chapter 1 . 3/7/2006
i disagree with fellow reviewers, I like the way you put passion in brackets as i think it divides the mental closeness from the physical closeness. I don't know if thats what you wanted to acheive though! 'hard' is a very well chosen word, reflects the harshness of the snow and generally has a nice strong impact on the whole thing. I love it - it's not that sensual but i wouldn't associate that word with ice anyway :)
| Aquafied chapter 1 . 3/6/2006
a bit more sexual than sophisticated
blunt but almost innocent
snow is such a beautiful stranger
| Jonathan Kimberley chapter 1 . 3/6/2006
another very good poem hun ) keep up the good work.
| Sophie Ulquiorra Allen chapter 1 . 3/6/2006
Creative, sexual, and I love the bracketed 'passion'. It rather reminds me of those 19th century love poems for some reason. O.o
| Duck8 chapter 1 . 3/6/2006
i like this it's good but the '(passion)' irritates me slightly i don't understand why you putin the brackets but other than that i think it's good and sexual but not vulgar go u :)