Reviews for My Castle in the Air |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing. I love the whimsical feel to the poem. I can definitely relate. This is a good concept. I may try something like it myself. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great poem. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "I have been told a hundred times The very worst of all my crimes Is my habit of building castles in the air" : It starts brilliant in the beginning, and never relents in being amazing. Great poem, and am looking forward to readning more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i don't know how you wrote this, but it's fantastic. I love it. Especially the very beginning. "I've been told a hundred times/that the very worst of all my crimes/ is my habit of building castles in the air." Just that one fragment draws in the reader. And the way you rhymed it flows perfectly, each example and analogy fits in perfectly and you end it with just the right touch. I'd give it a perfect 10, and it was a definite joy to read. Seriously, I loved it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice poem! I loved the ending on this. Actually, I just loved the description too. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hiya! Nice to see something new from you in the poetry department. I'm also sorry to hear you're so caught up that the Course of Eight Years may not resume till summer. :( At any rate, I think you did well with this. I might suggest changing the last line to read "and to that castle I begin to build a stair." I hate suggesting actual changes to text, but that last line doesn't seem to flow as well as the rest of it. Take care! :) |