Reviews for Under the Umbrella |
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![]() ![]() ![]() very sad and pretty. you have real talent. the words are very smooth and spellcasting. great job. :) love, . |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow. This is just stunning. It's so pretty. I loved the intro to it. I think you should've gotten a higher grade. I think that you have a wonderful talent for storytelling. This is so somber and meloncholy, but deffinatly lyrical in it's own right. Great imagry. I love how you keep it very somber, not any teenage angst that could've been in this composition. I think that this could easily be longer or part of a story. Mostly I do think it would be great if there was more back history, before the mother was ill, during, and after. It could be a short novel! anywayws, great work. and I did love the ending. Keep it up! |