This story is definitely intriuging. THe only problem I have with it is that it tends to go too quickly and sometimes you resort to dialogue instead of description. Take your time, and try not too be too expository in your dialogue, because it gets boring.

I love the plot though, it's great. The characters are interesting and well defined.

Great job overall, post soon!

God, love this story, hun. Poor Kendra, getting sucked in by that slutty bitch Monica. Can't wait for the next chappy!

I liked this chapter but it was a little rushed I think it would have flowed better had you taken more time to smooth it together. Other than that you're starting to jack up my blood pressure, way too much stress happening here. I sense at least two triangles, and...I'm a little nervous...I don't like triangle they make me itchy, but since I know what a great writer you are and i love the story, I;m sure I'll be able to hang tight through it all. So keep up the terrific work!

Oh yeah, I had to tell you. Dude, my boyfriend's name is Alex and his name was in your oneshot IM-told story. Pretty weird... Heehee...

Yay, an update!

Exciting. Monica is such a bitch. Oh I hate her, I hate her (but I love how you wrote her).

I like Kendra, though.

I really like this Ryan guy so far... interesting...

Update soon!

no Cyril you dont need a complication like Ryan. but you got him anyway.

cant wait for more..

Heehee, I liked that chapter... but NO! Kendra! You bitch! Why would you fuck that slut? Gah.

How the freak do I look like a liar? I guess it’s just because I’m young. What. Ever. - loved that line. It's so true.

I love Sylv... i want more cute Sylvester/Cyril-ness... heeheehee...

Kendra fucked her? But why? Monica's a biotch! And Kendra actually gave into her?

And what's with this Ryan dude? I dunno if I like the way he was looking at Cyril, and I can bet Syvester won't like it.

Hahaha! I love the title of the chapter: The Attack of Ryan! Things are getting very complicated... So, Sylv really is bisexual... Very interesting... Dirty Little Secret... very appropriate for the scene, don't you think? Rhea's Obsession... I need to look that band up...

"I mean, I always get what I want, and I haven’t gotten laid in like three weeks and I am so fucking horny.”~Hilarious! I don't know if this is supposed to be funny, but it's so hilarious! Monica's like a nymphomaniac or something...

I love your story... And thank God, you fixed the quote thing! Great job, as usual, and I didn't find anything wrong... But that whole MonicaxKendraxSylv thing just shocked me so much that I didn't know if it was even supposed to be proper for it to be in there... O_o

Continue! I'll be waiting... I'm hoping to update my story this week, so watch out for it too... _

Gah. Fuck I hate Monica. Self-centered bitch. Bleh. Lovely update though. xx, Caden.

Ok... That Monica character really freaks me out... More than Sylvester... Sylv freaks me out just a little bit... I don't have a problem with gay people since two of my very best friends are homosexual... _

This is a very eye-opening ficcie... Write more! Update soon, sweetie!

And fix the quote problem... The story's getting hard to read with it...

Sweetie, you have quote problems. Don't put two quotes in a single paragraph. That's wrong and hard to read. Keep improving, you're really good. I just wanted to point that out. _

That was a good chappie too! I was entranced with it... Carrion's character is a little bit bipolar... But Cyril's Algerba-challenged side is really brilliant... I love the first-person view of things, but I think the parts where you stray off of it makes it a little confusing at first and then ties it all together, which is brilliant.

Brilliant, I have to say. _

Whoah. This is brilliant. So brilliant that I'm speechless. I didn't notice any grammatical errors.

Keep it up. I like.