Those last two lines are wonderful. So expressive! I can't wait ot read more.

Love the line, 'And flirting with the night air', feels so, real... Is this a real event?

pretty good, but I feel that there should be another line added. after "on what we were missing" you should add: and to what we would be partaking in.

I dunno. it just rhymes and add's a bit more to the poem.

anyway. good piece.

'i filled him in on what we were missing' gorgeous way to end. 'flirting with the night air' that's just gorgeous.

In love with those last two lines.

Loved the subtle message, my fave line and flirting with the night air, it reminds me of a flippy skirt that hovers of your knees that's flirting with night air...I don't know I'm weird

but i lovyed it lotsy yeayuh!

keep it up