Reviews for Dissonance
Xerophyte chapter 1 . 6/20/2006
It's a drop of water, hurling itself into a

pool of water you'd mistaken for glass,

and ripples surfacing across something

you thought would be still forever.

I LOVE THAT STANZA WITH ALL MY TINY LITTLE HEART! Wow. I like how the stanzas before are all very harsh and then this just a wow. I like the relation from the title to the poem, and I love the song that inspired it.-The former Scribeo and Andi Carmichael
checkerboxed chapter 1 . 6/17/2006
Oh. I love this one, a lot. I think it has something to do with the darkness of it, and how the reader is forced to accept the darkness. Hmm.

And I especially liked "every gritty/grain of sadness." It gives the whole thing a very downtoearth feeling. Love it.

Thanks for the review to 'Magic is OUt Tonight'... one of the longest I"ve ever recieved. Made my morning.

Have a great day,
Plinky chapter 1 . 3/17/2006
Incredible. Absolutely amazing writing.

So powerful. "it's like a smile that doesn't reach your eyes." Fantastic writing.

"exactly the way you want to feel." That's SO it. (Sorry to go all american.)

"tearing every gritty grain of sadness away" Amazing.

The last stanza is perfect.

You are an awe-inspiring poet. never stop writing. (I'm in a funny old mood tonight. Amazing poem.) chapter 1 . 3/16/2006
This is pretty good. Your verbs and adjectives are awesome. The metaphor works well, too. Nice work! Keep writing! :)
FunkyFlower chapter 1 . 3/16/2006
happy holidays! and cool poem. i really like the tone u created with the strong vocabulary. enjambement techniques were good and awesome work overall!

Rhea Valente chapter 1 . 3/14/2006

i LOVE this - its goin on my fav list.

I love how you laid it out - so each line is just a continuation of the last...


~wolfeh (15.08)
truth is subjective chapter 1 . 3/13/2006
! Actually, I can't give an accurate review until I've listened to the music so *hinthint* D Nice stuff here, by the way...
Aquafied chapter 1 . 3/12/2006

but anyhow, hah, almost everything i personally write is inspired by music, water

it tires though

interesting, song isnt one of my favoritesbut the poems nice