Reviews for All I Got Was Sand
Diana Shore chapter 1 . 5/19/2006
Really like the entire poem, but LOVE the last two lines.

The flow was off a little in these lines for me:

fuck the roses and the horses with the wind in your hairas a knight wraps his strong armaround your waist as you ride off into the sunset

Maybe:

fuck the roses and the horsesthe wind in your hairas the knight wraps his strong arms around your waistyou ride off into the sunset

Take care, D.
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 3/30/2006
wow.. very angry and well done... i love the whole beginning part and the but on one line is very cool