|Reviews for Early|
| DarkBlysse chapter 1 . 5/30/2007
I love how you described the stubble-very original.
| Sophie Ulquiorra Allen chapter 1 . 5/20/2007
Vivid and provocative, I love the sensuality displayed here. Of course, the bracketed words always add something to the tone of your poetry. Great work!
| lastwrites chapter 1 . 5/12/2006
Mysterious and laconic. Genious! ;)
| Jo Madden chapter 1 . 5/8/2006
good description. keep it up.
| Symphony of Stars Ice Flame chapter 1 . 5/1/2006
Powerful! I really could imagine the scene!
| Gilee7 chapter 1 . 4/18/2006
I was trying to scroll down for more; I thought this poem was longer. :(
[Wrap my legs around your centerfold;] Best line of the poem; definitely my favorite. It seems to be the most poetic, and a great opening, too.
[bite your adams apple (softly)] Softly or not, that still seems like it'd be kinda uncomfortable. I wouldn't want any girl chewing on MY adam's apple, that's for sure.
[I love the shag-carpet of stubble that / runs across your cheeks.] Great two lines here; great word choices, too. "Shag-carpet" is a perfect way of putting it; and "runs" is also a great word choice.
[(charms, like the dusty / candle dripping wax onto the floor)] Great imagery. Candles almost always imply sex to me.
Hm . . . I wonder what this poem is about? Haha.
I actually don't quite understand the title and how it ties into the actual poem. I guess I'm missing something. The only thing it makes me think of is an early ejaculation; a 10 second bang-bang, but I know it's not that crude.
I like how sexy and provocative this poem is, and yet it's still not dirty. It's like you tip-toe around the bed as they're ... uhh ... you know.
Great poem as always.
| SarahJaneDrkAngl05 chapter 1 . 4/5/2006
this is good keep up the good work!
| missmeghanh chapter 1 . 3/30/2006
suggestive much? even so i still love your work.
| like a lover chapter 1 . 3/26/2006
dark and sensual and perfect. perfect as always :)
| astral boy chapter 1 . 3/24/2006
yeah, this was cool. um... don't really know what else to say. I liked the last part, made it sweet.
Thanks for your continuous support. :)
| flaming.footprints chapter 1 . 3/22/2006
Ooh this is glorious in a way. Bad ass
| Farran chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
The atmosphere in this poem is just so. It's sort of indescriberble but I'm gonna try. It sets it so well and runs through, making the poem so readerble.
| account not in use chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
closed doors, but the light pours in-that's how it is at my house. i'll close my door, but light stil comes in no matter what.
| Maxwell K chapter 1 . 3/20/2006
erotic but not dirty, well written!
| EWindheim chapter 1 . 3/20/2006
oh. Very descripticve, if in a sneaky sort of way.