Reviews for Hypocrite |
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![]() ![]() ![]() stein auf baby, stein auf. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i know what you're talking about. great work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() LOVED IT! Just the words I would say. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ive tried to find something "constructively critisising" to say, but i couldnt find anything :S hah, amazing poem btw, love it. Sounds like the same thing which happened to a friend of mine XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think this piece is good. The emotions are well expressed, although straight-forward and I like the defiance of the tone. However, I'd say that from about halfway through to the end of the poem you kind of lost momentum. It's not as snappy as the first bit I think. Also you might want to revise you rhyme a little, some lines are a bit too long. I hope this helps some. Nice piece, keep writing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes, isn't high school fun...Nice done. I can relate it :D. |