Reviews for Butterflies in mine eyes
Nemonus chapter 1 . 6/29/2006
Interesting! I like the lines "The swing creaks as I soar toward the sky " and "Though I do wish for Light's caress just once". This really gives a picture of the narrator in a way...
Joelle Duran chapter 1 . 3/31/2006
This is exquisite! I really like how you have the refain with the butterflies woven throughout, and how you end with a variation of the beginning words. I also like how you hint at a story, but make it vague enough that readers can readily identify with the poem. Gorgeous.
catching-falling-stars chapter 1 . 3/19/2006
wow! this was awesome. i loved the metaphor with the butterflies. this is an awesome theme. stellar job!
mizu no kokoro chapter 1 . 3/19/2006
beautiful and meaningful. lovely work

keep writing!