T_T so sad..I liked this. I dunno if the formating of "away from me" really worked for me personally. But I do like the idea of the poem. Keep it up.

Aw...that's so beautiful. *wipes tear*

I enjoyed reading this, nicely written. )

Oh, this makes me think of so many people I know... and even myself, sometimes. It's such a natural response, isn't it? Even when cognitively you know one thing, the rest of you is terrified that the opposite will happen.

Well, done.

WOW! this is just beautiful! you summed up what i feel right now. XD

I both like and don’t like the repetition of ( e) it works for me but it also doesn’t. This is mainly a narration piece where the other two that I read were highly detail oriented so the change might be throwing me off.

“I feel afraid, and like my heart is in two…” I’m sorry but your use of (LIKE) right in the middle there sounded so valley girl - it really made me look back and say: “Did they just say that?” It really through me off.

I’m kind of on the fence with this one - I really like how you ended it with “CLING” but the simplicity of the narration (almost whiny at times) I don’t think it did YOU, or what I’ve just read from you justice. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.

suffocating.

reminds me that my friends seem to vanish slowly, and quickly.

I know exactly what this piece is talking about. I'm in long-distance relationship, and it nearly kills me when I don't hear from my boyfriend, but I know that our love is something rare and strong and can withstand this distance between us.

Very touching piece. Good job.

Hai! I certainly understand this piece...as a fearful clingy girl who tried her hardest not to be a fearful clingy girl myself, I can really relate to this piece. I think you have summed up the feelings quite well indeed! The main beef I have with this is that some of the lines are hard for me to read...I like spacing out the letters like that but put double space between words or something please!

thank you for the review you gave me earlier .. i read through this poem and .. it's too good .. serious .. you're studying to teach english? .. well, i'm sure you're going to be an excellent teacher .

I love your formatting! I enjoyed your poem as well.

~xoxo~