Reviews for SeventyFive American Dollars
chrisertastic chapter 1 . 6/9/2007
That is twisted
Lirael1 chapter 1 . 5/20/2006

That's about all I can say. And I mean it in a good way.
hoowdoideletethisaccount chapter 1 . 4/3/2006
-On hand gingerly let go of the chilled bar- *One

Wow, what a sad, awful story. Human beings can so, so abuse one another. Why do we turn a blind eye on such suffering? Why do we in these rich, contended countries of North America ignore the abject poverty of other countries, where people starve until they will sell their children and their souls? Very sad, indeed. Very thought-provoking.

You managed to write this in a very brief and succinct manner, giving us only yhe information that was absolutely necessary, while still conveying the power of the subject. Good job!
Absynthe Greene chapter 1 . 4/2/2006
Oh, this is so sad. And the saddest part is that it's probably vrey true. Amazingly captured and heartwrenchingly written.
CatNap chapter 1 . 4/2/2006
... Hm... I'm thinking "powerful" but also...Hn? Which man was the girl referring to? The one who had the cash before or after?
Unready chapter 1 . 3/31/2006
disgusting topic, good execution.
Jason J. Ross chapter 1 . 3/26/2006
I'm glad that you are using your talents to bring attention to this subject. Well done.
Rath Roiben Rye chapter 1 . 3/25/2006
That's so sad. I almost cried. I think that the lengths people go to to make a quick buck are sometimes cruel and ridiculous. Especially when this kind of thing is involved.
St. Mock the Turtle chapter 1 . 3/25/2006
Wow. Reading this makes me feel like I've been stabbed. It's so simple and I think that's where the power comes from. Um, you said you wanted people to be critical, but I can't think of anything negative to say. I guess gramatically I'm wondering if there needs to be a comma after "frozen" and if it wouldn't flow better to insert a semicolon after "men" instead of starting a new sentence. Oh, and "The world's newest sex-slave" is a fragment, but it looks really good isolated from the sentence above. Maybe if you put a colon after beaten? I don't I think this is amazing. This story accomplished in so few words the tragedy that documentaries and news stories seem to loose in thier jumbles of dates and events. I just thought I'd offer those suggestions since you asked.
mac1012 chapter 1 . 3/23/2006
Nice one.. Though the thought of the story is somewhat sad along the lines when they were to pay for the child..

I like this.. and especially the last line..

Brilliant - that's one word I can say.. ;D Keep it up!
Chemically Induced chapter 1 . 3/23/2006
well this is gnarly. the bargaining puts such a cold, heartless feeling into the story. masterful ending line. hits you like a kick in the nuts. ;P

love, .
Aquafied chapter 1 . 3/22/2006
so very wrong and world, and it happens. it does

sorrowly done.
a lonely september chapter 1 . 3/22/2006
so fucking sad but so sweet. maybe i got it wrong, but either way, it's so amazingly written.
ChasingPerfection chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
It should read "One hand gingerly..." not "On hand gingerly...". Other than that...I like the final "Daddy" a lot, really drives the point home much much more than the rest of the story could have hoped to without it. (heh, with sentences like that one I shouldn't be allowed to write...) anyway I also like how you catagorized it under "horror", that also affects my understanding of it.
Loup17 chapter 1 . 3/21/2006
sigh... the slave trade... one of the most pristine examples of the absolute corruptness sometimes conjured from the bowels of human society...

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