|Reviews for I Don't Believe|
| msdewey chapter 1 . 4/9/2006
This really seems like two poems put together with some extra verbage between. It seems the first ends at "The end of the world is coming m'love" or maybe even earlier and the second one starts at the second "I wonder if you're a raven or a dove" or so. It just really wanders - there is a definate lack of cohesion. It's not always a bad thing, but here it really makes for an unsatisfying poem. It seems like you have several ideas that would be great if you pulled them out and focused them a bit more. Sometimes short is sweet - even when it's bitter. Keep writing!