I've had nothing but good impressions of anything I've read on your page thus far, but as you had a feeling about this, perhaps... It feels candid, which is good but too direct. It lacks the subtlety that your other poetry has. While the sentiment is there, try centering it around a more specific event in indirect terms - the whole show not tell of the other poetry and prose, as I've said, is masterfully done and very much enjoyed. Your haiku is particularly fun for me, even when talking about less happy subjects. Beautiful work.

directness, clear of flashy words and phrases, sometimes is art in itself. kind of a bad sentence. it sounds like something written to vent, or vindicate, and that it does well. monstrosity is a little harsh. i'd say, poem without the poetry. taht way, its still poetic. :)

love, .

This is a very true, and very well written poem. I wish I had your talent for words.

I like this for its simplicity. It really gets the point across so specifically. A very relatable feeling. Well done.

its not bad . . . honestly. it's different. i like the contrast between the stanzas.

it makes me think how i dislike conflict but almost live for it, because it happens so often

but i avoid it like the plague

so i am not sure, about that. or this piece, its flighty, thats what makes it have good taste

yup, the sentiment is there alright! don't fret, we all have days when the words we conjure aren't a patch on what we're feeling. this is an excellent 'sketchbook' piece, there's so much to draw from and build on and it has such fantastic positivity!