|Reviews for Hyena|
| Angelic Hellraiser chapter 1 . 8/24/2008
I like her already!
| luv me like no other chapter 1 . 10/16/2007
this sounds so good and tempting. I like the last two lines of the first stanza, it made me sorta laugh (weird me?) and i like your endings, with the last two lines in each stanza in parenthesis and the italics.
| none of burt's beeswax chapter 1 . 7/4/2006
ouch. i like it. it's so true that people ignore pleas for help. anyway, great topic with a fabulous, pin-pricking way of writing. (does the pin-pricking make sense? like pins in the skin...it just feels like that. sorry that i'm not more articulate).
| Butthead chapter 1 . 5/22/2006
egad, girl. you are i liked it.I did, I did.:))
This girl skurrs me. I hope she isnt anyone you know.
Sweet and short. Good job, cracker.
| dancingintherain chapter 1 . 4/9/2006
intriguing...especially in light of summary
| toxic-noodle725 chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
oo. this hyena grl sounds... i liked the poem. its short but says a lot! i loved the way u ended it. the last line's my favorite! keep writing!
| mocha chapter 1 . 4/3/2006
i like this one; it's very feral.
| elvenstorm chapter 1 . 4/3/2006
Oh just love the last few lines! The ideas an excellent one and like how it isn't a cliche, very original. The repetition is well used, doesn't get boring at all. Such a clever piece, good work.
| Named Gene chapter 1 . 4/3/2006
"she says 'please stop'but she’s the one on top"
Simple and not so sweet.
Least favorite line:
"escaping her soul"
A bit wishy washy.
I've no penchant for rhyming but it effectively emphasizes here. Great general feel. Only critiques: 1) "Displayed" isn't such a great word, especially in short poems where word choice is everything. It's pretty passive and doesn't give the reader a lot of imagery to work with. Other words could be painted, stitched...
Anyway, loved it as a whole. :)