|Reviews for variations on sight|
| acccountkiller chapter 1 . 5/14/2006
I am so envious of your talent...I love the last two verses...actually, I find I always particularly like your endings. The whole rain stanza and tongue cut part was so bitter as well...I am crap at reviews, but this is nonetheless amazing! Love,Mia
| no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 4/17/2006
You have some wonderful striking images in this, especially the broken pottery and the cut and shredded tongue. It's a very nice poem. Keep writing! :)
| chaos called creation chapter 1 . 4/2/2006
I smell boy.
This is so nostalgic and subtly fantasy-like that I'm feeling kind of tipsy. Great entrance stanza, it makes me think of photographs and intersections
Second stanza is highly relatable.
The third is probably my favourite since 'refreshment slipping soundfully to the earth' brings up some crazy cool imagery. broken pottery too. and the phrase 'leftover love' kind of makes me want to change my penname.
fact: a shrimp's heart is in its head
you are zee supreme bubblicious bubble of wisdom -knights you-