okay. a statement short and compact. not half bad. (it is an essay, right?)

aw...i was reading through and was all tense like "why is she so worried and tortured the poor thing?" Then I understood about her love but it didn't make me less tense...until I read "and the size of her thighs". instantly i cracked up (and at the same time understood exactly!) and relaxed...until i started reading and was kinda half tense, half relaxed. Basically what I'm saying is nice honest comic relief with the thighs comment and I feel as if this made me feel the way she was feeling - tense, with momentary relaxation, and then a rising sort of odd relaxed tenseness again. I must bow to you for this...*bows until her head hits the floor* amazing job with the emotional cycle thing girly!

I like the imagery that this short story presents. I think you should expand this one- make it a bit longer! See where it takes you!

-[Scott]

ah lovely. i enjoyed this and its hopeful, determined ending. i know exactly how she feels. the description is keen, and wields the word-brush to paint the prose-picture masterfully. "restful for moments, tense for hours." is a great phrase. idk if this is goign to continue on, this story, but if it does, ill be there reading it. :) well done.

love, .

Beautiful characterisation. It was short, but - to use a cliche - it was sweet. :D It was also admirable in its creation of empathy in the space of some 300 words.

...that's all I have to say. (flees)

First of all, I'd like to thank you for reviewing my story. Made my day.

This little story is so sweet! I think I'll put it on mah favorites. All your work is wonderful, I can't wait to read more of it.

Laters.

about college, her job, and the size of her thighs.-ahh, reminds me of my friend

and really blends with HIM