Reviews for eclipse
Ellin Louise chapter 1 . 4/8/2006
beautifully written.
bleed gilead chapter 1 . 4/8/2006
again, you showcase your fantastic skill in imagery and disjointed discription. great job.
White Tea and Ginger chapter 1 . 4/8/2006
pretty. obviously very well written because i can picture this vividly.
water lily nymph chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
ooh it reminds me of some kind of abstract painting of a sunset or a lost world. great job!
midnight skies are scarlet red chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
Reminds me of Omar Rodriguiz-Lopez. Also known as the singer of Mars Volta...Very complex, yet simple. Perfect blend of imagery and some type of personification.

10/10
Infinity Plus One chapter 1 . 4/7/2006
Beautiful imagery. I must say.
Aquafied chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
very tantalizingbut there is just something waiting in this

and i cannot figure out what it is.
poetic abortion chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
"asphalt kisses" is my favorite line. ever. justsopretty. oh, and that ending is quite fabulous. again, you make imagery love.

* Noelle
breezy nostrils chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
wow. i love love the imagery in this poem. so beautiful. nice work.
Kranky201 chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
I think these is really gorgues and nice the entire poem is really neat and sounds really good to my ears.
chaos called creation chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
Have you read any of Sarah Dessen's books? Your title reminded me of her story 'keeping the moon' which is a good read if you're interested.

Nice word play going on here. I think it would sound better with 'ground' instead of 'down' in the fourth line though. keep scribbling :)
crazy dog events chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
Absolutely incredible imagery. First four lines are my favorite.
Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
Beautiful detail; the abstract emotion and construction of this made it feel so alive and livable. Wonderfully done. Keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.
hey maria chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
"drown in coffin shaped rings"

Coffins are rectangular. Rings are...not. :)

In any case, great imagery. "asphalt kisses" is one of my favorites.
Smoky Bear chapter 1 . 4/6/2006
gorgeous and sublime.