Lacks in eloquence. Makes up in unstrained simplicity. Fragments aren't the best type of review, huh? It would be better if instead of 'Of the early past' you put 'Of an ancient past'-But who am I to judge? Besides it is your writing. Well...? Am I annoying you yet, Hojo?

good! very realistic contrast shown.

the last line rocked; totally brought everything together in the end

I really liked that last line.

Juliet.