|Reviews for For The Kingdom|
| SummerMindset chapter 1 . 5/31/2006
Interesting! o While reading it, the scene of a Lord of the Rings battle came into my mind. Creative!
| helium lost chapter 1 . 4/26/2006
I LOVE the rhythm and the flow of the poem, though I think "They’ve not got long" could be rewritten as "They have not long" (because the tone is a bit different from the rest of the poem). And there should be an apostrophe here: "In soldiers' eyes".
The ending seems to have been added after you finished writing the whole thing, and the atmosphere shifts abruptly-I don't know if you intended that or not. Other than that, great poem! :)
| Xecende chapter 1 . 4/17/2006
Wow, moving poem, loved it. You managed to make it rhyme quite nicely.