aw...cute stuff...a little clishe but still dead romantic...like one of the those old movies ... great style :D

Actually, you wrote this poem like you were an expert on the subject. I loved how it was set upon the beach. A little cliche and overused, but you made the poem unique and personal. I love your style of writing! Keep it up!

This was a very beautiful love scene. Since you asked for the male perspective, I would have to admit that I do not know how lilacs smell. Maybe other guys do but I don't. But if you feel that the presence of lilacs is important, then don't change it. It's beautiful work regardless of the perspective of gender.

Interesting... You wrote a love poem about a girl from boy point of view and you're a girl... A little confusing but I like. The parenthesis were great. I love parenthesis. hee hee. I give you major props on trying something new. The result was fabulous. Bravo.

good but i don't really understand why u need parenthesis

Babes...I must bow to you for the "the waves came hard" line! I love the double entendre (sp?) there, plus it makes a nice bridge between the setting and the (unnamed but fairly obvious) action. *bows* as I am not a guy as of last time I checked, I won't try to comment on that one, but i will say that i doubt guys noticed some of the things you added in there - like the difference between brown and tan on the bikini and identifying the scent as lilac...but i could be wrong.

hm, interestingi am not a male, but it seemed a bit, not to be mean, but cliche.

anyhow, it was nice