|Reviews for America: A nation of Hypocracy?|
| Formerly chapter 1 . 4/22/2006
I can't bring myself to go in depth. I'll just say that when a title is misspelled, the reader expects a shitty story. Your essay was just about what I'd expect.
| PaiselyAvenger chapter 1 . 4/14/2006
You have a good premise, but your organization just didn't work for me. I would've liked to see some examples or statistics about racism in one paragraph, then perhaps your suggestions for solutions in concluding paragraphs. Your call to action is good, but I would've stuck it exclusively in the conclusion for a strong ending, versus having good phrases spread throughout the essay. Also, you seem to have thrown in the war in Iraq kind of randomly. It could fit your premise, but I think it needed to be explained more. Perhaps, talking about how Muslims/Arabs are encountering harsh climate here in America. But that's just my reaction.