Reviews for Moment
Aiko-Moon chapter 1 . 9/9/2008
so your say that this really did happen to you.

if so that would be extremly awewsome yet a bit awkward

what concet did this happen at?

had to have been an insane one
jadedmari chapter 1 . 6/9/2008
The flow of the piece nice- you present your ideas in a short, choppy pace that fits the tone. Try and use adjectives of "fire", "pain" and "moment", though it is not lost on me that that might be you solidifying your idea. Capitalization of every line might help a little with the reading, though this is only a minor detail and does not detract much from the piece. Nice job, and thank you for your time and your reviews! I apologize for my slow-reaction time; my internet has been quite irritating for the past two or three weeks, and sometimes I am lucky enough to be given enough time to write rambling reviews...Keep writing!
La Vida chapter 1 . 4/19/2006
Good stuff. I can relate to the should try writing songs.
Lissa Wyga chapter 1 . 4/18/2006
wow, the heat you created is great. The Fire image worked perfectly in this.
Amethyst Horizon chapter 1 . 4/18/2006
this is very visual. :) it's very different from my writing style, i think that's why i like it so much. good poem!