Soo cute :)

I loved this story. I read it all in one night.

But, I have a question for you. Is this the original, because I saw you wrote another based on the story and I was wondering if it was this piece or the rewrite that came before the sequel to this story. Well, just get back to me.

:p

My favorite line is at the end "what did i have to lose? other than my heart?"

yay D

Ava, this is basically the most amazing story ever! I love the characters and the setting seems perfect for this kind of thing. The romantic parts make me want to melt . . .

I'd definitely read the new one when/if you post it. I love the original and I'd be interested to see the changes!

Ignore everyone, doll. Even ignore me. Do want you think is best. You aren't writing to please your reviews, at least I hope you're not. You're writing to tell Laila's story, not Laila's story the way your reviewers want it. Things never come out perfectly the first time. Editing, rewriting, reworking, and rewording is a part of life. You fix things to come up with a better end result. I would love to read the new version. I want to hear Laila's real story, not the first, faulty telling of it. I'd be honored to have the true story, to have you spend your own free time to correct the story and make it better, and then be open enough to share it. You face rejection every time you share something. I believe your writing and stories are great enough that you don't have to fear rejection. There is no way that your writing won't appeal to someone somewhere. But enough of my rambling. To sum this up, I'd love to read the re-written story.

Good story. I love Fall Out Boy, it was nice to see one of thier songs. Once your done with rewrites, can't wait to see the rest of your story!

and justa heads up too... i wont be reviewing the rewrtite of Clapton cause

1: i like it the way it is

2: i want u to finish ur other stories b4 doing this rewrite

3: what's the point of having a sequel if u'll change the original?

nice. A bit speedy, but nice none the less.

do guys plan things? ...in all my life every single guy ive known..and tried to plan things with...theyll be like yeah yeah yeah whatever...

but its still good for the plotline...mayb hes just a very organized guy.

hey...good story so far. i just wanted to point out a couple of things i thought were a bit confusing...

. it was sort of random how all the sudden he had been thinking of "dating" her...

“Exboyfriend?” he asked amiably. I nodded and turned my phone off. “From past experience, the quickest way to get rid of one of those is to get a new one.” I looked at him curiously. What in the world was he talking about? “And the best way to get a girl back is to make them jealous by having an even better time with someone else.” The life lesson was fascinating, but I felt it had nothing to do with me.

see, its like, he doesnt know that she has an ex boyfriend, and all the sudden hes like WOAH LETS PRETEND TO DATE EACH OTHER!

and yeah.

.also, she seemed to be kinda like "i dont know..."when he asked her to pretend to go out with her. earlier she had been saying "hes a frikin SEX GOD" and seemed to be flirting with him alot, so wouldnt you think she would think about it for a bit, like a second, and then be like..*secretly going crazy* and then be like...sure! why not! sounds good! know what i mean?

i dont know...just suggestions.

but good chapters overall. now i shall continue with the rest of the story.

hmm...she so likes finny

i like this story

Dude this story is great but the ending just plain sucks. It's extemelly anti climatic and we dont find out how things worked while Jaiden is at college. But good write all the same, keep up the good work

heya, this is a great story. but as i'm not quite sure, is that the end or not? ahh well, cya later ~ Alenor.