Impressive writing I must say. Different style and yet also very intriguing. Suggestive of action but told in a manner that does not invite criticism or censure. I believe you have what it takes to be a writer.

I"m really getting into this story. I like the way you just tell it as it is.

Keep it up i'll be watching... um... reading you... hehehe

Good work :D

PS. TY for Review