Your summary is lovely. It definitely drew me in.

The actual story was touching. It's something in the way it's written, sort of whimsical. How you captured the progress of their relationship - slow but steady, observation before real conversation, was beautiful too.

Awww! This was an innocent,sweet, light oneshot. I enjoyed it thoroughly! And yeah hazel eyes are for dreamers. :)

Xoxoxox

Zaina/ Anastacia /Stacia

The story had a sad tone so I was expecting a bad ending... To me it would have been a great endin if it were actually sad. Like one of the main characters dying.

Nevertheless it was well written :)

oh, I absolutely love this!

Ooh me likes this 'proseinpoem form thing'. The guy, man he was incredibly cute! both baby and boyish cute. So shy! Aw!

Congratulations on a job well done. _

gulistanlik

This was really charming and it is definitely going into my favorites. :) I like how the boy isn't all cocky and arrogant but shy and timid. :) Great job.

tuggin' at my heartstrings, chiclets. You're quite good at that.

That was so incredibly sweet! Great job :).

AW! THAT ROX! I WISH THAT WAS ME LOL

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I'm typing this really fast 'cause there's a spider in my room and oh my gosh it's right there and it's scary but anyway this was a really good oneshot I loved it very much! Hehe.

I likey.

This is so sweet. I dont know how to describe it except sweet.

This story is just amazing. It's almost masterful the way you've managed to capture the many stages of a budding relationship, and it is nothing short of amazing the way shyness is written it. I love that there's no dialogue until the very end. Overall, phenomenal work. Keep it up.

beautiful! short and sweet, just the way i like it(: can't wait to read more of your writings(:

beautifully written. i loved the way it progressed. it really makes you think. bien.