I really like this.

You are completely right.

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Nice job! The meaning was subtle, but still visible. Things are hard to describe: feelings and emotions even more so. But you caught the idea very well. Bravo!

phantom_jedi

Dear lord, Christy, stop assuming every poem I write with the word 'hate' in it is about my dad... I've got more depth than that, I mean, jesus, I hate the guy but he's not the only person in the world and neither am I. I hate, I hate a lot of things, you know I do, I hate country music, and asparagus, and when people review with whatever crap they assume (invariably mistakenly) my stuff's about followed by a fucking QUESTION mark. Lemonade? Sure. Your dad? FUCK OFF. Don't make them the same tone of voice, don't, Christybell, I know you've got more depth than that otherwise I'd have chucked you in as a friend AGES ago.

I like the capitalisation of Despair and the word garbled and the last five lines.

very nice. i like this. it's so true, but it's also difficult to draw despair out, although i very often attempt to. a lot of people love my art, but it's never perfect enough to me. anyway, thank you for teaching me about true despair.

This is a thought provoking poem... How would someone go to draw despair?

Cool poem, I like.

Good job! Well done! Keep writing!

~Anna~

...You have a unique style of writing. Your technique flows well even though it has its bumps here and there(...that didn't make any sense, did it...) Anyway, in this poem, it shows me a different perspective of things. Very nicely done. Bravo!

you have quite a way of getting your point across, and you did it well. gives people a lot to think on. bien.