|Reviews for Bars|
| Alyzh chapter 1 . 5/1/2006
I'll try to explain why I like this so much.
Firstly, your writing is perfect- this poem doesn't have a particular beat or rythm, and it's not very long. But it captures something without having to use a lot of words, which isn't something I often see.
"I stole your soulthrough the metal railings"For an opening, this is both lovely and powerful. It really demonstrates the feeling of being trapped and helpless. This poem makes me think of childhood innocence becoming an adult acceptance of the way things have to be.
Sorry to have gone on- but I wanted to let you know the immedeate effect your writing had on me- I thought it was simply gorgeous.
| The-Original-Neko chapter 1 . 5/1/2006
more please write more to this its does not seem finished i want to know the stroy behind these two people