Reviews for remorse
I see London I see Sam's Town chapter 1 . 7/7/2008
I like the places in which you chose to break your lines. However, I would've liked to see where sentences end and begin (e.g., capitalization, as well as punctuation). Other than that, I noticed that you have "warm" ("her body has lost warm"); it should be written as "warmth" instead. The ending was a bit sudden, but the word choice and (as I said earlier) how you broke your lines makes for an insteresting read... It's also a bit suspensful, which I like :)

J.V.
in a jar pk chapter 1 . 5/5/2006
i liked this quite lots, mhmm i did.