the length of the poem is perfect...it descriptions are a bit vague but sincere. nice!

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The lastline is the most powerful,i think...Short and blunt. Ilike poem.

this is a good poem...its written really nicely and the way you italized, quoted, etc the phrases, really made it a whole lot better...nicely done... i have a poem kinda like it...its called Falling in Failure... i thought it was half decent till i read this...lol